Wednesday, January 6, 2010

on repeat, at the club

The line: "Your thickness is my sickness... gurrrrl."

What She Heard: "I'm feeling woozy. Must be your mid-section."

Why It's Wack: You must think rhyming neutralizes creepy behavior. Your persistence is less annoying than your apparent obsession with my thighs, but every good hook needs at least a verse and a chorus.

I Think What You Meant Was: "I like you so much, you've triggered my mild tourettes."

Next time, try: a new line after the first attempt doesn't yield your desired reaction. If rhyming is your thing, show your creativity with more than a one-liner.

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